Winning Screenplay – CLOCKWORK
Written by Eric Hackler


NARRATOR – Becky Shrimpton
PERCY – Jason Martorino


Genre: Crime, Thriller

Synopsis: The murder of Roxie has just taken place, and Percy Landon, late 30’s detective is walking methodically through each suspect, sitting in front of him. Over a series of stylistic montages, Percy steps back through each minute in time and through the potential motives of each suspect.

Get to know the writer:

What is your screenplay about?

It’s the end of a detective story. The suspects have been questioned, the evidence, examined and the detective is ready to tell us who did it. But have you ever wondered if that speech at the end of the case seemed a little rehearsed…?

What genres does your screenplay fall under?

Mystery, NeoNoir, Thriller, and (very debatably) Romantic (once you know all the characters’ motivations)

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Short answer? It’s suspenseful, satisfying and has a killer of an ending.

To go through the long answer, I’d have to include that it’s characters are complex with competing motivations and histories, and though this short primarily uses montage, if we were to go feature, the whole case would be this interconnected collection of flashbacks within flashbacks ala Guy Richie or Christopher Nolan.

How would you describe this script in two words?

A Detective’s Revenge (three words, I know)

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Either V for Vendetta or Fight Club

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

This has been in my mind in, in some form or other, for almost 8 years. I wrote the first draft in college for an assignment my teacher then cancelled so I’ve held on to it, tweaking and improving it over the years.

How many stories have you written?

I’ve written 36 films (including 5 features), 15 short stories, 2 one-act plays & one full length play.

What is your favorite song? (Or, what song have you listened to the most times in your life?)

Probably Holiday by Green Day though iTunes tells me I listen to We Didn’t Start The Fire quite a lot too.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

The biggest challenge in any detective story is making sure all the pieces in the plot fit together well but in this case, the hardest thing for me was conceiving of and then creating a character who the audience could hopefully connect with despite the horrible things he’s done.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Acting & Directing have always been my passions. I’ve also gotten into nature photography recently and I teach fight choreography. I also ghost hunt in the summer.

What influenced you to enter the festival? What were your feelings on the initial feedback you received?

Most of my writing has been crime-centric (something my friends tease me about) so when I was on FilmFreeway looking for festivals to enter, this one naturally caught my eye. So far, the feedback’s been great. You know how, as a writer, there are moments of the script you’d love to review if you had the time – well the feedback I got hit almost all those moments and gave me some great starting places for how to fix them.


Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Editor: John Johnson

Camera Operator: Kierston Drier

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

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